See why I put it here first? Thank you.I'm confused. I know what you're saying but it's too convoluted.OK, Folks, I am running the verbiage past you. Have at it!
Do you love coffee? Gillum House Bed & Breakfast has decided 2010 is the year of the COFFEE. Any 2-consecutive night or longer reservation may choose a country of coffee of green coffee beans from the current in-house list and we will do one roast for you as a gift of the Gillum House. (We will grind it for you if you do not have a coffee grinder.).
Coffee on My Mind:
We are all about coffee at Gillum House. Coffee from (list a bunch of countries here). Savor it during your breakfast with us and remember your stay with a pound of your favorite coffee, compliments of Gillum House with your 2-night stay.
Sorry, just realized you didn't say 'pound'. So, whatever your amount is, put it in the sentence. Like Bob said, No one knows what a 'roast' is so tell them in ounces or pounds or cups.
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Revised revision:
We are all about coffee at Gillum House Bed & Breakfast. Coffee from Brazil, Panama, Kenya, Hawaii, New Guinea, Peru – approximately 16 countries of regular green coffee beans in house (4 Decafe). Savor it during your breakfast with us and remember your stay with enough fresh-roasted of your favorite coffee for two 10–12 cup pots of coffee at home, compliments of the Gillum House with your 2-night stay.
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Okay, sorry have to add my 2 cents -gillumhouse said:See why I put it here first? Thank you.
Revised revision:
We are all about coffee at Gillum House Bed & Breakfast. Coffee from Brazil, Panama, Kenya, Hawaii, New Guinea, Peru – approximately 16 countries of regular green coffee beans in house (4 Decafe). Savor it during your breakfast with us and remember your stay with enough fresh-roasted of your favorite coffee for two 10–12 cup pots of coffee at home, compliments of the Gillum House with your 2-night stay.
You have some cool mugs - you have to give them the mug AND the coffee.
I also disagree with "with enough fresh-roasted of your favorite coffee for two 10–12 cup pots of coffee at home," I would just be more specific, no need to weigh and spell it out for them.
Then there is - drum roll please - the bulleting. Take the guess work out and bullet what they get on a list.
Can there be something catchy like "If you love coffee you will savor your stay at The Gillum House" this would seem inviting those coffee lovers to try it out!
Coffee to savor at home and complimentary Gillum House Cloth and Clay Mugs for Two - hand drawn and designed by your host's husband John. (or however you word if he is the host or not)
Your choice of of two:
- Kenya
- Brazil
- Panama
- Peru